Joe's 5 fan fiction links

The Fringe Benefits of Friendship

The author sums up seven friendship fringe benefits that you can get from your friend or friends in situation where you are out of control of yourself or the situation.  The first benefit is to claim that you are so drunk that you didn't know what had happened.  The second benefit is to put the excuse on yourself and your friend that both parties was passed out unconscious and are held responsible of what happened between them.  The third and fourth benefits are identical. When you or your friend are highly agitated and out of your or their mind, you or they are not to be blamed on the selfish act you or they did.  The fifth one is only a kind of social etiquette when you are leaving your friend to say goodbye.  The sixth and seventh are quite disgusting in taking advantage of your new friend when you meet your ex in the street or social function even though with the avoidance intention.  The eighth is always to take the advantage of the circumstance to kill your friend. The ninth is to tell lies to their parents about your friend when you have the chance to meet them.  The tenth is to get a kiss to allow them to appear in your blog.

I am very furious to say that these are all rubbish and damned shameful to take advantage of your friend's trust by claiming these are benefits that you can get on the fringe of the emotion derailment from your own and your friend's sobriety and clear mind.  In the end, you end up no friend at all.  You can't count your friends on what fringe benefits you can get from them but only their friendship and mutual trust.

Will Their Time Run Out Soon

The whole chapter is devoted on the description of the process of falling in love, the sensation they felt toward each other and the emotion they showed when they met at the doorstep of the hotel room.

One spelling mistake unintentionally appears in the last dialogue - "Just get in and stop complaining, I will hold your hand it (if) that makes you feel better."  Some of the punctuations are not clearly done but maybe it is a way to write a love story to be more expressively described.  The reminder at the end is for the reader to give him review.  A clever move.

Good Meets Bad

The whole chapter described how lovely his wife, Charlie, could be in her pregnancy and how deeply Brax loved her.  The author also made a very deeply moving sensational description of Ruby, Brax's daughter, who was grown up as his wife's sister and was to be revealed to the truth.  There is one intricacy in the story involving rivalry between the gang, "Riverboys" and the local police sergeant.  I am sure it is very interesting to read on.

Unfortunately, one spelling is wrong, of for off, in "before feelings his arms around her sweeping her of (off) the toilet floor."  I think blog language structure could be written differently from those of the classics with no clear distinction between main clause and subordinate clauses.  But as in two of the English sayings taken from the inscribed picture, it is "more in it than an empty herring; there is more to it than meets the eye."

Fatal Attraction

The story was revolving round two lovers of different background, Brax the Gangster of Riverboys, Charlie the Police Sergeant.  She was warned by her stepmother and dad of the predicament she was in and tried to persuade her to give up.  But she entirely surrendered herself to her desire for wanting Brax in spite of her daughter Ruby and Casy, Ruby's boyfriend being in the hand of their foe.  Brax was trying everything he could to protect Charlie and was standing in the dilemma, giving up the love for the glory of being the leader of the gang or surrender all the collateral to Brodie, his secondhand man.  The plot went on.

It was a very intriguing, and antagonizing encounter and the very demoralizing love affair between Charlie and Brax.  They should not be attracted to each other in the first place on the very obvious circumstance that they belong to two different worlds, as the author points out.  But climax after climax can be generated with these intertwining threads of emotion and social justice in the eyes of the readers of common behavioral acquiescence standard.  I do hope the author could be more lenient when he(she) continues pick up the thread how the Brodi and the gang are treating Ruby and Casy.  After all, they are the scapegoat, innocent sacrifice to the rivalry between Brox and Brodi.  So be merciful, please.  It was tragically written with only only one spelling mistake and the plot follows the old treacherous plot for all love stories.



Unexpected love

It was only the introductory chapter, describing why Emma comes to Australia with her best friend Lindsey and what happened to them on their first landing in the little diner in Summer Bay in New South Wales, Australia.  A clear description on the calling off of their wedding because of her fiancee's infidelity with his secretary.

The author gave a clear introduction in a plain forward description, even mentioning Emma's sexual preference toward Charlie, a police sergeant, and her friend Lindsey's forthright sexual attraction toward the police officer Angelo on their first encounter in the diner where they had dinner with Ruby (Charlie's young daughter), her boyfriend Casey, Xavier and his girlfriend April whom they met on the beach.   Actually it is an interesting story to read on as the writer tempts the readers with two clues to follow.

Spelling mistakes appear in: sectary for secretary (obviously not deliberate), of cause (twice) for of course, where a bout for where about, miles (proper name) for Miles, and so on.  Some punctuations were wrongly placed or missed.

Kelvin's 5 fanfiction links

The Price of Sacrifice-LOTR fanfiction

Description: This is a story about a soldier named Beregond who loyally defends his captain, Faramir from the Steward, Denethor who attempts to burn his son when he went insane from the death of Boromir. During his attempt, he slew two of his good men which he regretted instantly. As the story progress, it expands mostly on how he dealt with it and the price he had to pay for the action all the while confronting the main characters which might be the judge of him. Towards the end, he resolved this issue and the story ends in a good tone. Mostly set on Beregond's side of the story and during the Return of the King period.

Critique: In all my life, I never seen a LOTR so finely composed. The spelling, the grammar, the punctuation and structure is all top-notch, obviously well edited or either the author is an impressive writer. The characters stayed in character, evidenced by the author's vast knowledge on the LOTR. The titular headlines also derived the theme of this story which is really convenient. The plot for one, is interesting when Linda herself insert an OC into it and the way she developed her OC. There are no plot-holes, the author keep the description of the characters to a minimum to focus on developing the plot of her OC. But it's near perfect because she tends to drag some scenes such the battle of mordor and describe Beregond's son too much
Ultimate sacrifice-Digimon Tamers fanfiction

Description: This is a "What If" fanfiction. It depicts Takato in a situation after the D-Reaper incident where he and his partner, Guilmon had been shunned by others. Takato himself, is burdened with intense insecurity because he thought he was in fault of causing his friends to reject him. When a wild digimon named SkullMammothmon appears and the others are fighting a losing battle, Takato decides whether to save them or not. He choose the former. By saving them in the process of sacrificing himself in the guise of Gallantmon(fusion of Takato and Guilmon), his action makes his friends come to realization that they are the ones in fault in the first place and build a memorial in hopes of amending for their behaviours. In the end, all of their actions indeed are forgiven by Gallantmon.


Critique: In my opinion, the writer needs to world on his spelling more e.g title. Grammar  has a few errors. Punctuation needs some work, exemplified by the ""she thought part. It should be "",she thought. Hmm, song needs to be bold because it can be really hard to distinguish which is music and which is story. Somehow, the song paid a pivotal role in the story.  The song itself displays his rejection by others and towards the end, realization when it's too late. Characters are pretty OOC except Takato and story is not edited. I'm happy that the story makes sense however if it come to this conclusion. The short is nowhere confusing. The plot is really decent, which makes this a decent story.

Embarassed-The Simpson fanfiction

Description: A one-shot of a random scene between Milton and Lisa. It started from a talk about Milford's past relationship to the point where Milton finally confessed to Lisa when Milton learn what a kiss is from Lisa.

Critique: Hardly, an embarrassing moment except in some point in the story e.g when Milton is startled and when he want out from this embarrassing conversation. It's more towards  teen-teen romance but using two person, Lisa and Milton to portray it. Everything's fine, good short but some grammar error like "How kissing". It should be "How to Kiss." I agree on the characters being OOC but could not help but laugh at the "interrogation" and the kissing scene, it's pure gold.

Study!-Digimon Zero Two fanfiction

Description: This is a shorts putting Daisuke or Davis in the English shitty dub in a situation where studies for his final year exam. The teacher assign a new tutor because he end up screwing up his past tutors every time he gets one. When his new tutor turns out to be Hikari or Kari in the shitty dub, he began taking lessons from her, not really annoying because he knows her. When Daisuke got an A+, he was rewarded a kiss by Hikari and mused that he wants to do it more in the future. It ends with Daisuke and Hikari confessing their feelings to each other.

Critique: Full of errors, plot-holes and unfathommbale. I could not even get what he is trying tell me. This story should be about studying but degenerate towards romance?Sure, Daisuke has feelings for Hikari but to be done by tutor-student relationship, the foundation is pretty weak. First of all, shouldn't he be thankful for her for helping him achieve his result instead doing all those kissing-kissing scene? Inserting it earlier ? Either way, this is a pathetic excuse of a fiction. Refine it then we're talking.

Sailor Moon N-Sailor Moon fanfiction

Description: In an alternate dimension, darkness had taken over Earth. By chance, a boy stole a wishing ball from Queen Beryl, ruler of the Negaverse wishing for someone in order to save this world from the clutches of darkness. He gets Naru, a friend of Serena Usagi Tsukino who takes on the mantle of Sailor Moon of this universe and saved the day.

Critique: A very interesting twist, albeit abrupt.What happened to Jedite? Did he disappear or anything? Looking at this, it looks like a typical magical girl saving the day type of story. The action scenes seems abit dull, the monster easily fall without a struggle. A few grammatical error but no big. However, the story seems incomplete. Good attempt at re-iterating the intro of sailor moon though.

Damian's 5 Fan Fiction Links

Food Fight at Arkham

This is a story about what the inmates do during their dinner time in Gotham City's own prison known as Arkham Asylum. It focuses mostly on Harvey Dent (aka Two-Face) and how he dislikes interacting with the other inmates during meal times - especially when it comes to The Riddler's annoying riddles.

One thing I would criticize about this fan fiction piece is that the title is a bit misleading. It's called "Food Fight at Arkham" but the food fight does not occur until the very end of the piece. The majority of the piece is mostly about the inmates trying to solve The Riddler's riddles.

There are also some grammatical mistakes here and there that need to be fixed. For example, it says "Harvey didn't mind the Riddler to much" when it should have said "Harvey didn't mind the Riddler too much". There's also the spelling or "originaly" when it should be spelt "originally" instead.

Planet of the Apes and the Forbidden Zone

This fan fiction is set in the future many years after the events of the original movie. It sees an Orangutan teacher telling her students a piece of Ape history. In her History lesson, she talks about the moments after Taylor (the main character in the original movie) discovers the Statue of Liberty.

This was an intriguing and well written fan fiction. I loved the way the characters were written as they stayed true to their on-screen counterparts. The chimpanzees wanted the Forbidden Zone (the place where the Statue of Liberty was buried) to be preserved. But the other apes like the Gorillas want the place destroyed as they do not want any evidence that humans once ruled the world.

After much discussion, the chimpanzees have their way and the place is preserved as a piece of history so they can study Earth's history. It had a nice ending too as the author reveals that the teacher is speaking to human children.

I loved the ending as in the films, humans are depicted as evolutionary inferior to the apes and are treat them like scum. This shows that the apes and humans made a truce and are loving amongst one another as equals. It kept me guessing what was going to happen as in the 2nd film the world just blew up and everyone died. This has a much better ending...

Changing Perspectives - A Short Spider-Man Fan Fiction

This was a small and humorous story about J. Jonah Jameson wanting some new photos of Spider-Man from a "different perspective". The Daily Bugle owner is tired of Peter Parker taking similar looking pictures of Spider-Man and demands something new to be printed for his newspaper.

I really liked how the author stayed true to the character of J. Jonah Jameson. Much like he is in the comics and the movies, he's a real pain to Peter Parker and always wants the best pictures from him regarding Spider-Man. It's humourous to read as Spider-Man fans know that Peter Parker takes pictures of himself so it will be hard for him to get "different perspectives" of himself.

The ending was unpredicatable too. Not only did Peter Parker get the photos he wanted, but he also showed that Spider-Man was a good photographer too. This made sense as would conceal his true identity if he showed that Spider-Man took a picture of Peter Parker.


Blue Dragon - Jealous

A very short story about all the male Blue Dragon characters falling in love with the beautiful Kluke. One of the characters (named Andropov) devises a masterful plan to persuade the other male characters to fall in love with other people so that he can have Kluke all to himself.

The one thing I would criticize about this particular fan fiction piece is that it fails to have an introduction to introduce the characters. Blue Dragon is an anime/video game but it's not as famous as say Batman, so people would't have an idea who the characters are. It also ended rather abruptly as Andropov didn't get Kluke in the end as another character got her instead. There's was no argument or bickering in the end so it seems as if the author left Andropov with nothing despite all his efforts to woo Kluke.

Terminator TSCC Fan Fiction - Jealousy

This is a fan fiction based on the characters from the short-lived TV show, Terminator: The Sarah Connor Chronicles. It follows the female Terminator called Cameron and her decision whether or not to kill a human being responsible for building a smart machine that can take over the world.

It's a very short story, but it's a great scene taken from the actual TV show itself. I loved the way he made Cameron have no dialogue since the character rarely speaks in the actual show. It also has a good ending as it leaves the reader guessing if she killed he target or not. It would have been nice if the story was a little longer as details were too brief in my opinion.

Rania's 5 fanfiction links

A Reckless Frame of Mind

After the war, Draco had to redeem the Malfoy name, so he forged his own way in the wizarding world by creating a new section of mental healing called Psychediving.  His latest patient is Auror Harry Potter who is apparently a pathological liar, and who also just tried to violently end his own life. Something about Harry’s condition keeps nagging at Draco, and in his arrogance, he refuses to quit until he figures out what. So, he dives into Harry’s soul and in the process finds out that Harry has been cursed. The curse makes people believe that whatever he says is a lie and see the worst in him. So, Draco gives him a piece of his soul to circumvent the curse.

Draco also discovers that Potter's suicide attempt was that he could escape into the muggle world and disappear for good. The story ends with Draco helping Harry escape from the hospital and telling him to go to Malfoy Manor.

The story is extremely well constructed and edited. The progression of the story is easily followed and it grips the reader right in. It is slightly too descriptive in places but it doesn’t detract from the story at all. One thing to keep in mind while reading this fiction is that it's a Harry/Draco pre-slash fic.

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A Determined Frame of Mind 

This is a sequel to "A Reckless Frame of Mind". It continues on with both Harry and Draco teaming up and trying to figure out who cursed Harry and why. It turns out that it was the current Minister of Magic that did it, because he was afraid that Harry was going to take over his position. In the process of the story, Harry hooks up with Draco and Harry deals with his issues that arouse from his curse and starts to rebuild his ruined relationships. Draco also takes his revenge on the people who hurt Harry in the process.

The story was well written and well edited. There was a meticulous attention to detail and it keeps you reading right through to the end. If I had any complaints, it would be that the inward angst of the characters and their thought monologue tented to drag on a bit. Also, please be aware that this is a Harry/Draco slash fic.

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Im What?

This is a funny story about Peter's stupidity. He runs into a black man in the street with a skin condition that turns his skin white. Peter commiserates with the man about the horrors of having white skin. Peter leaves the man feeling confused and heads home. He tells Lois what happened, and how awful it is to have white skin. Of course Lois tells him then that He’s white, so runs to the bathroom were he starts screaming when he sees that he’s white.

While the plot line of the story was funny and it is believable that Peter would do something like this, I found that Peter was out of character, and the story itself needed additional editing to help it flow better.

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Paper Hats 

This is fluffy piece of fiction, where Naruto and Sasuke are 6 years old and are friends in school. On Monday morning everyone has to make a paper hat, which they all do successfully, except for Naruto. He is sad because he doesn’t want to disappoint his friend. So, he takes papers home with him and practices making paper hats. Sasuke appears at his window and helps him with it.

For a fluffy piece, it fell below the mark, and the six year olds didn’t act like 6 year olds. I couldn’t get the sense of children interacting in this fiction, but other than that and a few grammar mistakes, the story was not bad. 

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Ding, ding, ding!

This is a humorous fan fiction that involves Sakura bashing. The members of team seven are sent out on a minor mission that turns major, when they are confronted by some missing ninjas.  Of course their sensei is nowhere to be found, so Naruto, Sasuke, and Sakura have to fight on their own. One minute into the fight, Sakura starts crying and whining about how she can be useful to the team, and not a burden. Naruto and Sasuke finally have had enough of her uselessness and leave her to prove her metal. Needless to say, she dies, leaving the rest of the team feeling as if a weight has been lifted.

The story is very well edited, with no grammatical or spelling mistakes. Also it is a very humorous piece that I recommend to everyone who hates Sakura. The only critique about this fiction was it’s length. It was a bit too descriptive for a comedic piece.

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Frank's 5 fan fic links

This is some Coronation Street fan fiction.

Sarah's 5 Fanfic links

This is a fans version of what happens after Breaking Dawn 'Life Teaches Love Reveals'

It is set after Breaking Dawn has finished it focuses on Renesmee growing up so fast that she is ready for 2nd grade at only the age of 4. It shows the odd relationship between Renesmee and Jacob, and shows how her parents handle the problems that arise.

I like how almost every line is dialogue, the story assumes a back ground knowledge of all the twilight stories and so uses very little discriptive paragraphs. The story is basically a conversation between Renesmee, her parents and at the very end Jacob

This is a prologue for Harry Potter 'The Wand Chooses the Wizard'

It follows Harry's mum with a short view of what it was like for her getting ready to go to Hogwarts.

I like how it jumps into the story and instantly has you questioning what is going on, is this before Harry's time or after he is married with kids? I found the odd spelling and punctuation errors to be jarring but all in all a very well written story that made me want to read more.

Charmed 'Death of a Witch'.  This is a snippet of life right before Melinda Warren is burned.

This story takes place in an episode where the 3 charmed sisters travel into their family past and meet up with there great great great... grandmother. The story is shown from their gggg.. grandmothers view, right before her burning at the stake. It focuses on her and the man who will keep her daughter away from the awful event.

It is very easy to read, and follows on from the program very well, there are a few moments where the wording does not quite work and needs to be edited but over all a great read.The language used is easily identifiable as something from the past, in a small rural area.

Dead Like Me 'The Reapers' Bodyguard'

This story takes off mid way through season 2 of Dead Like Me, George and Daisy both have multiple souls to collect but find that something is terribly wrong when Georges souls die  early and in the wrong area without her removing them from the body first.

It fits in very well with the story line of the program, whilst being a completely new and novel idea. I liked where it is going and would love to read more if and when it gets finished. There are a few minor issues with grammer and spelling which jarred my concentration but over all very well written with a lot of questions left over at the end.

The Big Bang Theory Sheldon's Harem

Amy has to compete this year for her grant against the social sciences department so has decided to start a Harem with herself as Sheldon's main wife.

I really liked the style of writing used it instantly had me imaging Sheldon and Amy talking using the same language they use on the show. A few times the writing style does not quite stand up to Sheldons level of intelligence but this does not stop the story from flowing easily.

Travis's 5 Fan Fiction Links Draft

Lord of the Rings Fan Fiction:

A Blankie and a Fauntling

This short story is a fluff piece about a young version of Frodo (the main character in the Lord of the Rings trilogy) finding his mother asleep without a blanket to cover her feet. So he puts his blanket over her being careful not to wake her. That's it.

Personally, I like my stories a little more poignant or at least exciting. So while this story bored me, I did appreciate that the author was able to use fan fiction to express their own personal and valid taste in story telling through the Lord of the Rings franchise. Having said that, even though the story was mundane and short it still included all the vital elements of story telling. It had an introduction, a conflict and a resolution, and it weaved them together in a way that made you feel for the protagonist.

A Brother's Bond

This piece of fan fiction takes place long before the events of Lord of the Rings. It involves two sons squabbling for the love and respect of their father. Boromir, the elder brother undermines his younger brother, Faramir's attempt to impress their father, which ultimately causes the two brothers to reasses their relationship. Boromir regrets humiliating Faramir and reswears a vow to protect his younger brother. At the end of the story we learn that this story was a letter written by Boromir years later during the events of the Lord of the Ring trilogy in which Boromir died. Reading the letter helps Faramir bring closure to the life and death of his older brother.

I liked this story for several reasons. I liked how it used events that happened before and after the standard Lord of the Rings storyline to bring more life to the characters. The story was fairly well written, and you felt for the characters. However, I think the author could have been a little more subtle about trying to pull at the reader's heart strings. This story could benefit from a few more drafts.

A Dangerous Couple of Days

This story takes place before the Lord of the Rings series when Aragorn served his kingdom as a ranger, which is sort of like a cross between a park ranger, a police officer and a special forces soldier. In the story he kills a deer, eats it and then kills some goblins.

"A Dangerous Couple of Days" is a prime example of bad fan fiction. I would guess the author is between 14 and 16 years old. The author attempted to explore unwritten life of Aragorn before he was crowned a king, which was a good idea; I'd love to know more about what Aragon's life was like before he was crowned king. However, the story has no plot line. It includes pointless information that only serves to drag the story out. The fight scene is so poorly described, and you don't care the protagonist overcomes the conflict at the end. You're just glad the story is over so you don't have to endure the author's amatuer attempt at writing anymore.

Not the Beard!

This story is about Legolas, the elf meeting Gandalf for the first time. The story takes place before the events of the Lord of the Rings trilogy when Legolas was a small child. Since Elves don't have facial hair, Legolas thinks Gandalf's beard is eating his face and is afraid of it. The end of the story jumps foreward in time to a point in the Lord of the Rings trilogy when Gandalf is thought to have died. Legolas is asked by his friends how he first met Gandalf, and he refuses to give a direct answer out of embarassement.

The story isn't terrible, but it does have several fatal flaws. Gandalf's character is inconsistent. He's portrayed as an emotionally distant old man as well as a play-friend to all children. None of the other characters, including Legolas, are developed well enough for the reader to connect to. The worst flaw though, was that the leap forward in time happens without any notice. So the reader loses track of what's going on and has to stop and figure out what the author failed to explain.

If the Middle Earth Entered the 21st Century

The protagonist of this story is Arassuil II, who was invented by the fan fiction author to be the grandson of Aragorn, the character who is crowned king at the end of the Lord of the Rings trilogy. This story takes place in the 21st centry. Arassuil is visited by a character named Kathy, who is a representitive of the United Nations. She makes a lot of politically correct demands of the king that he reacts to like an old man who is out of touch with modern times. He rejects all of the demands and the story ends.

I was excited to read a story that took the Lord of the Rings franchise into the modern world. However, this story failed to satisfy. There was no purpose to it. It simply has one character name dropping a bunch of modern concepts to a group of fantasy characters who act out of touch with a world they must have grown up in. At the end one character even says, "I am content in the Fourth Age....This 21st century is far too confusing for me." The characters didn't travel in time. So this would be like a 30 year old man today all of a sudden saying, "I wish this were 500B.C. I don't understand life in 2011A.D." It makes no sense.

Damian's Fan Fiction Draft

Hello Batmaniacs,

This is a fan fiction about the upcoming film "The Dark Knight Rises" Since the movie isn't out until next year, nobody knows what the real plot is. Here's my humorous rendition of what the film will be about. I hope you enjoy it.

No copyright infringement intended. "Batman" and the characters depicted in this fan fiction story are properties of DC Comics. "The Dark Knight Rises" is the property of Warner Bros.

A background on the story I based my fan fiction on:



The Fatman Rises


Nobody had ever seen or heard of Batman ever since The Joker had left Gotham City in absolute panic nearly four years ago. This was because Bruce Wayne wanted to make sure Gotham City was able to defend for itself. Batman won't be around to save the day forever.

Commissioner Gordon was now responsible for fighting the crime in the city without any assistance from The Caped Crusader.

As time went by, the citizens of Gotham felt safe even without the help of Batman. The fine work achieved by Commissioner Gordon and the Gotham Police Department were enough to keep the streets clean of crime for several years. Bruce Wayne was proud with the fact that Gotham City had finally learned to defend itself.

All that was about to change when a large shadowy behemoth arrived. It attacked Commissioner Gordon's police force with vicious rage and brutality. Even Gotham City's SWAT team was unable to contain this large "beast of a man". This so-called "man" single-handedly slaughtered the entire swat team and left Commissioner Gordon in a vegetative state. Luckily the EMTs arrived just in time to take care of Gordon. If they had not come when they did, Gotham would have lost one of its heroes.

The horrific event was seen on the evening news and none other than Bruce Wayne himself was watching. He knew the peaceful period that had graced Gotham City had now come to an abrupt end. Not since The Joker had an evil so great emerged and left Gotham City in complete chaos. There was only one person who could stop this threat - and that man was Batman.

Bruce Wayne questioned to Alfred, "Shall the Dark Knight rise again?"

Alfred knew it wouldn't be easy as Batman had not seen any physical action for the last few years.He was now rather fat and lazy.

Alfred smartly remarked, "The last thing Gotham needs is Fatman. Perhaps Robin can come back from his ballet classes to help you sir."

Bruce Wayne objected, "I won't sacrice Robin to that madman Alfred! He's far too weak to face an enemy like this!"

Bruce Wayne knew he needed time to become the fit muscly fighter he once was. Now was the time Batman needed to rise again. But getting into a slim figure in 24 hours would not be possible.

The "beast of a man" asked in front of the news cameras, "Can the Dark Knight please come out to play?"

Bruce Wayne had no idea what this guy wanted from Batman, but he knew he had to act quickly to stop further blood being shed.

Bruce Wayne paid a visit to Commissioner Gordon. He must have known if this beast had any kind of weaknesses. He was the only person alive who saw him eye-to-eye. 

Commissioner Gordon used to be an lively energetic fellow with no fear, but on the day Bruce Wayne saw him in the hospital bed, fear was written all over his face.

The nurse tried to calm him down when he screamed "Don't kill me" repeatedly.

After several hours has passed, the nurse came and informed Bruce Wayne that Gordon was now ready to talk. Gordon needed a oxygen mask in order to speak. . 

As soon as Bruce came into the room, Gordon immediately stated "Batman has to come back."

Bruce Wayne was taken aback by Gordon's demand, "Look at me Gordon. I'm in no shape to take on that genetic freak of a man."

Gordon gave what was the best advice Bruce Wayne had heard in a long time, "Use your weight to your advantage. As they say, more weight equals more dates!"

Bruce Wayne smirked,"I'm gonna need a bigger Batman suit."

Luckily, Bruce Wayne is rich and called up his own personal costume designer to make him a bigger suit. Bruce's new and bigger physique would have the clear advantage in the fight. Batman answered "The Beast's" call and announced on the evening news he would face him one-on-one at downtown Gotham at midnight.

The "Beast" referred to himself as Bane and he waited at the centre of Gotham's CBD for the arrival of Batman.

Bane screamed, "Come out now you coward!"

Batman thought to himself, the only coward here was Bane who punched the defenseless Gordon and nearly killed him.

Little did Bane know was that Batman was not going to confront him. Batman wanted to drop on top of him by jumping off a building. Batman was certain the impact from the fall would instantly disable Bane. A technique like this would not have worked before but with his new bulgier physique, Batman was sure this plan would work.

Batman took a deep breath and soared through the air as much as his weight would let him. Bane didn't expect a thing when a loud thud jolted throughout the entire city. After the dust had cleared, it was evident that only one person was left standing. Onlookers weren't sure who the figure was as both men were very fat.

A loud cheer from the crowd emanated as Batman stood up and shouted "Bane's reign of terror is now over!"

Although Batman almost flattened Bane to death, he did not kill him. Batman didn't intend to kill Bane as that was against his code of honour. Afterwards, the police came and took Bane into custody while Batman smiled to the crowd. Robin and Alfred clapped happily back at Wayne Manor while watching the events unfold on TV.  

Down at the hospital, a reinvigorated Commissioner Gordon uttered to himself, "Tonight, Gotham City did not see the return of Batman, but the beginning of Fatman."

Travis's Fan Fiction Draft

This is a Lord of the Ring fan fiction that focuses on the race of treelike beings known as the Ents, who played a minor role in the Lord of the Rings trilogy.

THE ENTS

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Before the War of the Rings there lived a race of peaceful tree-like beings known as the Ents. They lived in the forest of Fangorn and were rarely bothered by the outside world. You could walk through Fangorn and never know the towering Ents lived there because when they stood still you couldn’t tell the difference between them and the ordinary trees…unless you disturbed the peace of the forest. Then the trees would come alive and throw you out of the forest as gently as you’d let them.

By almost anyone else’s standards the life of an Ent was a dull affair, but they their own standards they lived exhilarating, full lives. They feasted on the sun and drank the rain like men drank mead. The Ents would spend months scratching elaborate, weaving designs in the sandstone only to see their masterpieces eroded away by the weather. The artists never mourned the loss of their art. They understood that all things are fleeting and the art of life lay in enjoying beauty the way a musician enjoys each note of a song despite the fact that it would be lost when the song ended.

None of the Ents were as full of life as the young sapling, Geofrey. He could never sit in the same grove for more than a few moons before he grew anxious to revel in the beauty of another one. The other Ents called him “The Traveler” because he was always exploring the forest, listening to its songs and sight-seeing how the seasons changed each hill and valley.

One morning in the peak of winter Geofrey was collecting snowflakes when his hobby was disturbed by a bothersome racket like a herd of 10,000 stags migrating through the forest. Not wanting to miss the spectacle, Geofrey strode towards the sound, but he didn’t find the beasts he was hoping for. Instead he saw an army of orcs meandering through the forest. Geofrey froze in place to wait until the intruders were close enough to snare with his massive wooden arms, but to his surprise the orcs weren’t causing any trouble. They were just meandering aimlessly like they were lost. Geofrey thought they must be under a spell. After some time he decided that if he left them alone they would wander straight through the forest and come out the other side on their own.

So Geofrey stood and watched patiently until he realized he was missing the snowfall. Granted, there was snow all around him, but he couldn’t enjoy it in peace with all the noise the orcs were making. So he revealed his presence to the Orcs as he walked slowly away from them. Usually the sight of a tree coming to life would send intruders fleeing, but the orcs didn’t seem to notice him. They just kept plodding along in pointless trajectories.

Geofrey had to travel several leagues before he found a spot suitably quiet enough to enjoy his winter hobby, but he had hardly spent half a day there before the orcs began to fill that corner of the forest as well. Again Geofrey left to find another grove, and again the orcs disturbed his peace before he could fully settle in.

Geofrey knew a valley with a steep pitch where man or beast never ventured because it was difficult to enter, and the river in the centre that had cut the valley was too violent to swim, fish or even boat on. It wasn’t a pleasant place, but he decided that it would be more pleasant than listening to an army of orcs clanging around.

Geofrey made the journey to the valley and descended the precarious slope to find half the other Ents in the forest had the same idea so there was almost nowhere to stand. Geofrey had never seen so many Ents in one place since the last eclipse festival. It was a sight worth seeing, but Geofrey had got it in his mind that he wanted to be alone right now. So he decided to go back to his original grove in hopes that the orcs had already passed by there completely.

Climbing back up the valley took longer than coming down, and when Geofrey neared the top he saw the ridge lined with orcs carrying heavy axes. Behind them a row of massive, empty wagons pulled by teams of Mumakil were being parked in a formation that suggested the orcs were planning to load them up with something. The scene confused Geofrey until he realized they had herded the Ents into the valley to be captured.

Geofrey ran/slid the only direction that wasn’t cut off by the orcs, back down into the valley. He didn’t stop moving when he reached his fellow Ents, but he shouted that the orcs had surrounded the valley and were poised to attack. Some of the Ents laughed. Some scolded him for being a scaremonger. Most of them just looked at him like he was crazy, but a few followed him because he seemed like he knew what he was doing.

Geofrey pushed his way through the crowd all the way to the torrential river and dove (as much as a giant walking tree can dive) straight into the freezing swell. The few Ents that had followed him stopped following at that point.

The river swept Geofrey out of the valley, and that began a long, perilous adventure that took Geofrey to the far corners of Middle Earth where he would meet fearsome foes and valiant allies. 


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rania's fanfiction draft

This is a parody fanfiction of the scene where Hagrid came to pick up Harry potter for the very 1st time, and take him to Hogwarts. It could also be considered as a crossover piece with the "Who's on 1st?" comedy skit :)

Word count: 861

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Disclaimer: I do not own Harry Potter. All characters belong to J.K. Rowling, Warner Bros., Bloomsbury, and Scholastic, respectively. Copyright infringement is not intended and no money is being made of this story. 

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Harry looked up at the giant man that came to escort him to his new life, and then at his aunt and uncle. He did that a few times with a glazed vacant look, until finally, comprehension dawned and he shouted squeakily, "You told me my mum and dad died in a car crash!"

"CAR CRASH?" shouted Hagrid, with spittle flying in all directions, dousing Harry in the process, making him shine, as if he had just taken a shower.

Hagrid continued shouting while Harry took a step back to avoid further showers, it was cold after all. "How could a car crash kill Lily an' James Potter?"

 "Well, if a crash is bad enough, it can kill anyone, especially if they were in the car," Harry replied smartly.

"Not a witch an' a wizard as powerful as those two were!" Hagrid countered.

"Then how did my parents die?" asked Harry. He wasn’t quite sure he wanted to know, but hey, anything was better than going back to scrubbing skid marks out of Dudley’s gigantic boxers. Plus, he may never have the chance to ask again.

Hagrid swallowed quite loudly and said in a quivering voice, "You-Know-Who,"

"Uh... No," said Harry. "I don't know anything about my parents, other than the fact that they died in a car crash"

“Huh? Who died in a car crash?” asked Hagrid while scratching his bushy beard

Harry pouted and exclaimed, “Duh! My parents! Weren’t you listening to me? Typical!! No one ever listens to anything I have to say! How am I supposed to grow into a healthy individual if no one ever pays me any attention!!”

After a very awkward pause, where the rats could be heard scurrying about, Hagrid said "Anyhow, these lousy Muggles never tol' you anything ‘bout your Mom and Dad. That's why I'm tryin' to explain about 'em."

"Okaaay. So who killed them?"

"Didn’ I already say? You-Know-Who did."

"You know who," Harry corrected.

"Yes."

"No, no. I mean, you can tell me who, right?"

"Yes. You-Know-Who."

Harry paused to think about it, and after nearly ripping out his sorry excuse of a bird’s nest hair, he decided that it might behove him to use a different tactic. The giant smelly, spittle spraying man was not going to outsmart him! So he asked, "Were my parents' obituaries in the newspaper?"

"But of course ‘arry! They were ‘eroes!"

Harry smiled and said, "And from the newspaper, you know who killed them?"

"Of course! They could ‘ardly put the blame on someone else!"

"Ummm..... They couldn't?"

"Well, You-Know-Who did have some followers," said Hagrid thoughtfully.

"Who? Who had followers?"

"You-Know-Who!"

Harry nearly screamed in frustration, but he wasn’t a quitter, and he was not going to stop till he found out something useful. So he asked, "Okay then, who blew up my parents' house?"

"You-Know-Who did," replied the giant.

"How would I know?" asked Harry.

"well, yeh obviously didn't. That's why I'm telling yeh."

 “Finally! We’re on the right track! So, who gave me this scar?" he demanded.

"You-Know-Who."

"Why do you keep saying that??"

"Yeh keep on askin me!!."

"You know who killed my parents," said Harry flatly.

"Yes,"

"Then why won't you tell me?"

"I just said. You-Know-Who killed your parents."

"No, I don't know who killed my parents."

“Yeh do. I just told yeh."

Harry's eyes narrowed in frustration and he screamed, "Are you serious?" He was startled when the giant inhaled sharply and started trembling and stuttering.

"How- how- do you know about him?" Harry remained silent, so Hagrid went on, "I told you, my name is Rubeus Hagrid. I'm not yer godfather."

"I didn't say you were," said Harry, sensing that he had said something to upset Hagrid, but not sure what.

"He'll never get to you. Now, I don't know how you didn't know about You-Know-Who but you know about Black-"

"Well, it would be hard not to know about black. Everyone knows about black." Harry interrupted, relieved that the giant was saying something that made some sense at last. Although he wondered what the colour black had to do with anything they were talking about. The giant’s world sure sounds funny.

Hagrid came closer to Harry and said, "Just what do you know about Black?"

Harry said while pointing towards the shadowy corner of the room, where his so called family was huddled together, "Well, black is . . . dark."

Hagrid stared at Harry's muggle family, "They told yeh that?"

"Uh, you could say that, yes. I mean, it was pretty obvious."

"Obvious that Black was Dark? I tell yeh, no one used to think that. It was a great shock when it became obvious."

"But it is obvious in hindsight," said Harry diplomatically. Wizards probably didn't need much common sense, especially if they couldn't die from things like car crashes.

"I guess it is," replied Hagrid gravely. "Now, come with me. We'll get yer things fer school." Harry agreeably left with the giant, figuring out that even if he couldn’t have a sensible conversation with the man, time spent with him would be better than time spent with the Dursleys.

The End

Frank's fan fiction draft

My Coronation Street Fanfiction (please read!)

Hello all

I am writing Corrie fan fiction, and would love to hear your views! Here is an excerpt from Episode 1.01 - Turnaround.

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The Rovers' door bursts open and Jamie flies in. 'Has anyone in here seen Mike?' he yells, silencing the pub.

Panicked, Danny jumps to his feet and knocks his pint from the table. It smashes on the floor. 'Mike? Where is he? WHAT'S HAPPENED?'

'He was sleeping - I went to the toilet and he was gone, let himself out...' Jamie cried.

Frankie looked terrified as she stood. 'He could be anywhere, Jamie, how could you let this happen, you know what's happening to him...'

Upset, Jamie merely stared at her. 'If you hadn't have left...'

Audrey and Rita rushed forwards, looking anxious.

'He can't be far, we have to look for him!' Rita cried, and with that the group headed outside into the Street, unsure of where to turn next....

... While Mike wandered around in an unknown street, cars passing in a flash of headlights and a hiss of rain, unknown faces passing...

Growing more afraid by the minute...

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And leave your comments in this thread! Hope you enjoy!

Sarah's fan fiction draft

This is my Fanfiction based on Laurell K Hamiltons' series Anita Blake, Vampire Hunter.
Disclaimer: I do not own the characters used and I am not making money off this story.
I do not give permission for my story to be used anywhere else.

It's hard to believe it's my 200th birthday. I shouldn't keep track I know that, but my men will find some way to throw a party for me and I really don't want one.

It shouldn't worry me, I mean it's just a party but I'm 200! Seriously who keeps track for that long? Looking in the mirror I don't look any older than I did when I was 30, long coal black hair, almost chalk white skin and no I'm not a vampire or shape-shifter, though many out there believe I am.

I'm half Mexican and half German. I am also a necromancer. This does not stop me aging, being the human servant of one of the most powerful Vampire masters in the world does. Mind you who's master and who's servant is still up for debate even after all these years. Jean Claude and I have been together for almost that entire time.

He's not the only man in my life not by far. If you had told me, Anita when you are older you are going to have a collection of men bigger and better than anyone else in the world, I would have laughed at you. But there you go; you never know how life will change you.

"What is taking you so long? You're normally the quickest of all of us when it comes to getting ready."

I jumped at the voice of my boyfriend Nathaniel, he's right I normally just run some water over my hair and I'm done, but I got distracted by the mirror, it still feels weird to look so young after so long.

"That's not true Micah is pretty fast when it comes to showering" I grinned at him as I spoke, I can't help acting like a love struck teenager when I look at him, how did I get so lucky?

"Yeah well, he's not here right now, I am and I need a shower so hurry up!"

If anyone else had talked to me that way I would have jumped down their throat, but I knew he was right we had an appointment and it never did well to keep the clients waiting.

I took one last look in the mirror and walked towards the door. I squeeze along side him and he smiles that smile he only ever uses just for me. I stand on my toes and lean up to give him a quick kiss before I walk through the door.

"Don't take too long" I smirk at him as I look back over my shoulder

He just laughs and shut the door. I walk towards my cupboard and sling the doors open wide, my clothes have gotten so much nicer since I moved into The Circus, especially when Jean Claude has the ladies take me shopping. Without them I tend to run towards the jeans and t-shirt look. Of course tonight I need to impress my clients, or so Micah tells me. I reach towards my burgundy dress shirt, and decide to couple it with my emerald green jacket and my little matching skirt. The skirt is just long enough that I will wear it, but only just. I don't normally wear short skirts but it really does make my legs look so much longer, being 5 ft 3' makes a girl notice these things.

I reach for a black lacy bra and matching panties and I'm set. I slide on my shirt then look around for my gun.

I don't go anywhere without it. I carry a Browning High Power, I know I know they don't even make those anymore, but what can I say when I find something I like, I stick with it. Most of my closet is full with tops in the same style with as many different colours as I could find.

I find it sitting on top of my pillow; Nathaniel must have moved it there for me once he got up. I pick up my custom made holster and slip it over my shoulders, the gun slides in easily.

Instantly I feel grounded, I used to worry about the feeling of safety holding a gun gave me, now I just move on, I try not to pick at every feeling I have.

“ Are you two ready yet? ”

Micah leans against the door frame with his arms folded across his chest, his suit jacket straining just along the edges from his muscles. He may be the same height as me, with a face too pretty to be allowed but his body is all male.

“ Nathaniel is just finishing off now", I shrug into my jacket automatically checking the line against the fit of the gun, " I don’t think he’s washing his hair so we should make it on time.”

 

As I finish speaking the bathroom door swings open and Nathaniel walks out fully dressed ready to go, he walks up behind me and wraps his arms around me.

“Okay lets go we can’t keep the big men waiting” he catches Micah's eyes as he laughs and I know they are sharing a guy moment.

We walk single file up the stairs and Micah opens the door, making the thick Iron look like nothing more than paper-thin flax. We walk across the parking lot towards my car when shots start firing at us from every direction. I drop to the ground pulling my browning out as a fall.

I check to see that Micah and Nathaniel are okay, knowing they can move even faster than I can. My eyes already scanning the area looking for trouble.

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